Sunday, 20 January 2013

Mountains of Grit


Down sleeping bag, check. Thermal ski cap, check. Walking stick, check. Camera, check. Guide and porters, check. We were ready for our great trekking adventure in Nepal. Our family trip was going to be a venture of a lifetime: we were going to trek up 12000 feet to Madri Himal high camp and sleep in tents for five nights during the coldest time of the year. Little did I know that after all the discussions we had about perseverance and grit in home base the previous several weeks, it would take all the grit I could muster up to make it to the peak.

Working out three times a week with my trainer set my muscles up for the first day’s grueling four-hour uphill climb, but ascending 800 feet was difficult for my lungs. It was a tough beginning, but I have grit, although the frost on my tent the next morning had me shaking both physically and mentally.  I was unaware that we hadn’t yet reached the pinnacle of the altitude or cold. I was in for a shock.

Setting out on the third day to low camp was to be an easy day; only a three-hour climb of about 1000 feet and then a full afternoon to rest up for the big day ahead when we would climb to high camp. After lunch at low camp, the clouds came in and engulfed us. Yes, we were literally in the clouds; we were that high up. The temperature dropped twenty degrees as the sun disappeared, and it was too early to snuggle into our sleeping bags, so we huddled around an illegal campfire. Crouching around the fire for several hours, dodging the smoke, and battling the wind became so tiring that we ended up eating an early dinner and going to bed in order to stay warm. Knowing we were going to get up extremely early to get to High Camp the next day and not wanting to deal with the exceedingly cold, we went to bed with as many layers as we could.

We got up at 4:30 am so that we would reach High Camp before the clouds and with the wakening of the sun. My hot water bottle was still warm, so getting out of the sleeping bag, where even in the tent my breath could be seen as I exhaled, took an act of tenacity I didn’t think I had in me. Two layers on the bottom, three layers on top, plus a down jacket, neck warmer, gloves, and a wool hat: I was out of the tent and looking for something to keep me warm. A full moon surrounded by clouds in the sky made us wonder if we would be making this climb only to have a view of nothing but clouds rather than some of the most majestic mountains on earth. Was it possible that we had come all this way and would miss the magic moment we had worked so hard to experience?

We knew we had to go for it and hope the clouds would clear. After some warm soup, we took off with our headlamps lighting one step at a time. It was thrilling and scary at the same time as we were not really sure of our surroundings. At times the wind blew so fiercely that I thought I might be blown off the narrow precipice. My eyes watered and my fingers were tingling, but my mind was clear and it forced me onwards. Gradually, the sun started to peek over the horizon that almost seemed to be below us. I felt that I was on top of the world. It was a glorious sight.

 We still had another two hours of hiking before we would reach high camp and I was determined to make it. Through the cold, shortness of breath, and tired aching body, I finally reached the top where colorful prayer flags blew in the breeze. The view was amazing as the clouds waited below in the valley letting us take in two of the highest mountains in the Annapurna region of the Himalayas – Annapurna South and Machapuchare (otherwise known as Fishtail). We had reached an elevation of over 12,000 ft. With so many elements and obstacles to overcome, the resolve and indomitable spirit inside of me took over allowing me to make this incredible journey. It felt incredibly satisfying to reach the top.

After taking in the view, and a much-needed snack, we finished taking a few photos, before heading back down. We were far from finished for the day.  We still had to hike back down two hours to low camp, pack up our gear and trek another three hours before making camp for the last night. However, the long trek down gave me plenty of time to reflect upon all that I had experienced and accomplished over the past five days. I learned to take one step at a time. I learned to concentrate on the task right in front of me. I knew that if I stayed in the moment, believed in my own determination, had a hope or a vision of a possible positive outcome that I could do what I set out to do – and that it would be worth it. 

33 comments:

  1. I like how in your lead, you reference your items like you are going down a list of your trip. I also like your pictures. It looked really fun!

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  2. I really liked how you used appropriate language and posted a few pictures to show what Nepal looked like. I also liked how you described your thoughts, feelings, what you were seeing, etc.

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  3. I like you story about grit because it shows that even during tough obstacles like weather, you can over come them and make it to the top! I can relate to this because in Colorado my Mom and I hiked up Aspen moutain, it wasn't as big as the moutain but it was definitely a challenge!

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  4. I really like how you described the scene and set up the story with you checking all the materials needed. It's amazing that you climbed almost 3,700 meters! Do you know exactly how hight the distance was?

    -Nakul Sharma :D :D

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  5. I really like how many details you put because it was really clear and you can picture you walking in the trek. I also really like your title because it literally shows what your blog post is about in a creative way. Do you feel like after this experience you've changed? In what way have you changed?

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  6. I like how you explained what happened and what you had to do to get stuff complete. And also you clearly explained you had tons of grit.

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  7. I think that the Photos that were taken were amazing. But I don't understand did you just climb all the way up to just spend a few minutes or did you stay overnight at high camp?

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  8. I think that the post was VERY well written and has good grammar,word choice, punctuation, and was descriptive. And I have a question what is an illegal camp fire? Was it that you made fire in illegal territory? I liked the first paragraph when you made it kind of like inner thinking.

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  9. I loved how you used so many descriptive details in this post. You're lead was very captivating, and you conclusion was the perfect finish. The pictures you took were just mesmerizing and left me speechless.

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  10. I really thought that you displayed your strongest writing skills in that post. You connected the theme of GRIT to your trip in Nepal, becoming a great example for all of C side.

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  11. I liked how you used most of your sense to describe your trip, like how you wrote what you felt, heard, and tasted. This makes it really detailed and makes me basically feels like I was there, the pictures were also well chosen and went with the blog. I have one question though, when you were going up the mountain could you feel the dropping temperature as you climbed up?

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  12. Was it hard to do that? I mean I know that I wouldn't be able to hike that mountain I would just give up and want to go back down. I really liked how you were very descriptive and I could vision myself being up there freezing.

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  13. Hi Mrs.Haas,
    I really liked your post. It was very descriptive, I could see the view, I could feel the cold air. Was hiking that mountain really hard, if I would hike the mountain I would give up. And how did your kids react to this trip, did they complain or did they love it?

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  14. Congratulations! You made it! I like how you related our home base talks to your trip, and how you described how cold it was and how the frost on the top of your tent concerned you. Good job on your climb!

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  15. I really like how in your lead you are saying the things that you need to bring. That explains to me that you are going on a trek. I also like that in your conclusion you tell the things that you learnt about the trek.
    Paityn S.

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  16. I really like your story. I felt your suffering of climbing the high mountains. You could add some more poetic language, metaphor and increase your vocabulary. I rate this 8 out of 11.
    thank you,
    Sabine

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  17. I really like your lead Mrs. Haas! I was excited to read the story because of how you worded your lead. The body paragraphs were very detailed making me feel as if I was trekking too. The conclusion was good as it ended the story leaving the reader thinking. One thing I was wondering is are we allowed to have more than 3 body paragraphs? Overall, I think your Story was amazing!

    Medhya

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  18. I can't believe you did all of that trekking. It must of been a beautiful sight to see all of the clouds and the moon. I really like your intro. I also like how you put a lot of detail and how you like verbally took us on the trek with you.
    Victoria Y.

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  19. Wow! That was amazing! I loved how you closed up the ending, except I don't think you ment to put the last and in the last sentence. Also, you said: "little did I know..." twice, in and they were kind of right after each other. But overall, great job!

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  20. Ms. Haas
    I like how you gave specific examples on how you had grit but one thing I think you could of done for a next step is only say "little did I know..."

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  21. It sounds like you really had grit in climbing those mountains.

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  22. That was very descriptive times and when you said that the wind might blow you off the narrow precipice, I knew you had grit to keep going because it could have gotten you killed.

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  23. I like how you talked about how you felt when you were on the hike. You talked about how you persevered and how you explained how satisfying it was to be up there.
    Sumedh
    21/1/13

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  24. I love how you explained the details neatly in the paragraphs and I like how you let the paragraph flow.The pictures just make me want to go to Nepal. The way you wrote this piece was amazing. I loved how you put the pictures so we could see how it looked like and then we would have an image in our head. Your piece is great! You should become an author or a journalist.

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  25. I like how you put each and every detail in the story because to me it feels like I'm really there and feeling the freezing temperature and me just sitting there screaming. Also I really like how you only wrote what you did on the hike and not what you told us in RLA witch was everything you did on the break because it would look like a 2- 2 and a half pages of writing.

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  26. I was really captivated by the descriptiveness of how everything in your way; coldness, soreness and doubt,and how you still managed to grit your way through the journey, plus the cherry on top with it paying off in the end.

    I also loved the amazing pictures.

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  27. I liked your beginning because it felt like you were talking to the reader. And your tittle was very attention grabbing and it really fit with your story.The personal pictures was a nice touch, too. And finally your ending on how you learned something made your story very meaningful.

    Mia

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  28. Wow Mrs. Haas! It really seemed like you worked hard and used grit to achieve your goal. I like how in the fourth paragraph you told what you were thinking because it made it easier to really understand what it was like for you.
    Maya
    Block C/D

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  29. Mrs. Haas, When I first read your narrative I new there was going to be a lot of vocabulary. Every single one I had to go to google's dictionary and search up the word. Precipice: A very steep rock face or cliff, typically a tall one. I don't thing that there are any things you need to work on, but using the transition 'Little did I know' a bit less. Good job!

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  30. That was a really inspiring story! It gave a clear moral, and you had lots of great description that really helped me visualize it all. I also thought your lead was very captivating. I really enjoyed your story!

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  31. Hi Mrs.Haas,
    Congratulations and celebrations...You Made it! I once went on a hike like that but it only was three days. I didn't go with my family it was only me, my brother and . the camp we enrolled in. I have got to say it does take a lot of Grit I really liked how you described every little thing! Like what you wore! I also really liked how you wrote your lead. It is like a lead in a published book! Anyway, Great post and great job on the climb. Your faviorite student, Nupur. Block C/D

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  32. I loved your narrative. You had a lot of descriptive details. I like how you took out all unnecessary things and had good word choice.

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  33. wow. it really told me about where you went and how it went, great format and a great story on it. ovcorse it is a teachers essay, really showed me a great model

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